It was a hot boiling day. People were sweating drips of sweat, the sun
was shining also glimmering. I was so hot I thought I was burning to crisp.
It was morning. The birds were singing. It was 9am, the delicious food
was cooking. My mouth was watery. I couldn’t wait to eat. We got ready to go to
the humongous Hunua Falls. My uncle drove his car like a cheetah running a
million miles an hour.
When we arrived, the others slowly walked while me and my uncle rushed
to the waterfall. I walked in the water. It was cold as frosty snow. Later on
my aunty and sister came with me. We took photos of ourselves on the hard
slippery rocks.
Later on we went to the other side where there was a dark creepy cave. When we got to the other side the water was so close that I thought it was as big as the Sky Tower. Finally we went home after eating delicious Subway.
You have used some wonderful descriptive language! Excellent paragraphing!
ReplyDeleteI liked your introduction Davina. Your How to Swim story is really cool I bet my cousin wioll like to read this and she might learn something.
ReplyDeleteMagnificent specific piece of writing!
ReplyDeletenice work daman and nice descriptive words :) by karlos
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