Hello.
I'm Mimi Schulz and I hate cleaning the toilet.
“It needs to be clean before Friday!” Mum yelled. “Why me? Why can't Dan do
it?” I whispered, “Dan has to go to high school you know that!”
My parents are a total bore. I have to do everything while
my 2 big brothers and my 3 big sisters relax and do what they want. I looked at
the toilet. It was dirty and it was wet. ‘Why can't Mum do it herself?’ I
thought.
I glanced at the clock. 8:30 already? Dan stood up and
grabbed his keys. Sally followed him and grabbed her phone. Dan walked out the
door and Sally tripped. I dashed after the phone and caught it. Sally got up
and looked around for her phone. She saw me walking to her and I gave Sally her
phone. “Thanks,” said Sally.
I walked in my room and grabbed my thinking book. I looked
at page 150 and saw my dream creation. “That's it! I can make a robo-cat that
can do my work!” I said excitedly.I asked my brothers and sisters if I could
use some things in their rooms. Guess what they said? “Ok. Mimi!” came the
reply.
I walked to Ella’s room and looked in her junk box. “How
can golden metal be junk?” I said to myself. I gently held the golden metal
like it was a delicate cat., and
I ran in my room and placed the metal in my spare box. I walked
into Eela’s room and looked in her
junk box. ‘Great nothing useful.’ I thought and when I turned around... “What
are you doing in my junk?” Said Eela.
“Take these instead,” Said Eela as she handed me some wires and gloves.
I realized that it was my
wires. “Why did you steal my wires?!” I shouted angrily at Eela. She tried to
show her best blank face. “Fine I'll tell you Mimi. So I needed to use wires
and I could only find your wires.”
explained Eela.
I snatched my wires and ran into my room and put the wires
in my spare box. I grabbed cuckoo eyes from Dan’s room and sprinted into and raced into my room and began making.
BANG! ZZZZZZ!
“Yes YES! Its complete! I'll name you Sprinkles! You were
made by Mimi Sculz!” I said. The robot
moved. “My name is Mimi Sculz! Yes complete! YES!” said the robot. “No you are
Sprinkles!” “You are Sprinkles.” “I am Sprinkles?” I asked. “I am
Sprinkles Sculz.” said the robot. It had
finally said its name right. I grabbed my laptop, which was programmed into
the robo-cat.
I typed: Sprinkles, clean the toilet. Sprinkles zoomed to
the toilet and started scrubbing the toilet. “Woo! Mu - Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...”
I fell asleep. I woke up hearing people screaming. “SPRINKLES!!!” I screamed.
I looked at every
house in City Avenue. I ran across the road and found Devil’s Road and I knew
that Devil’s Road was where somebody murdered my uncle. I turned back and I was
lost. I heard creepy sounds and I looked at a house. ‘Help! Mum! Dad! Dan!
Eela! Sally! Ella! Rus!’ I thought with fear.
“Mimi! Mimi! Mimi! Mimi! Mimi!” somebody shouted. “Mimi!?!”
said a robotic sound. ‘That sounds like Sprinkles,’ I thought. So I imagined
wolves behind me that was chasing me and that always makes me run. I actually
ran and escaped Devil’s Road.
I ran to Aunt Kiki’s house and saw Sprinkles making cake.
“Oh Sprinkles.” I smiled. What adventure awaits me? Nobody knows. And we lived
happily ever after.
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