Wednesday, 5 July 2017

The Black Hat

Once upon a time there was a boy who lived with his old, mute grandma. They lived in a rusty house but I bet it will be nice in the inside.  One day he was asleep and he woke up. He was walking through the forest as he saw something sparkling on the ground. He walked over to it and picked it up. It was a black hat, but then creatures started to drop out onto the ground. He decided to take the creatures home.

The next day he woke up and two creatures flew away so he found them and then they left again so then he went home. He was so sad that he had tears dripping down the front of his eyes. He was very upset and horrified that his creatures had flown away into the coldness, but they were happy that they were set free. Every day the boy would get lonely not having his creatures with him.

Then his sister flew over to the country from a sunny place. She walked inside her brothers’ house to see him unhappy. There was nothing that would cheer the boy up. One day his sister and him set off on an adventure through the tiny bushy forest, watching the birds fly with the freezing, cold wind. He was getting worried because he thought the birds were going to freeze so he tried to call them back but they did not listen.

They went to look for birds. When they found birds he realised that they were his birds.  His sister then was walking down the forest. It when boom! The birds were dead. He was so sad that they were dead. They had a little funeral.  But he didn't realise that one of the mother birds had given birth to a little baby bird. He suddenly heard a “Tweet tweet”. He woke up straight away.  He didn’t know what to do, but he was happy because he knew that they didn’t die in pain, they died in peace.                                                                                

4 comments:

  1. I like the way you have wrote your story because you have added in some good adjectives. T.D

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  2. I like the way you described how he felt and they way you didn't use the same sentence startes

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  3. I liked how you ended the story. I can really relate to the boys sad position.

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  4. I love how you have grate sentences starters.

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